Friday, May 11, 2012

Autumn


Autumn 
2/05/12
Autumn is here
Autumn has come
with a bucket of crinkly leaves 
When you walk to the park you see 
pile of leaves that have fallen from the trees.                     

While you're walking home 
you see a car going past 
and you get pounded 
by a bucket of leaves 
and they get stuck to your face.
                                                                                 By Daniel Minogue
WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)
Made the nouns do something
Started each new description on a new line
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).


4 comments:

  1. Awesome poem Daniel, I like How you set out your poem.
    What is your favourite part of your poem?

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    1. well Felicity my favourite is when you get pounded by a bucket of crinkly laves

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  2. Awesome Daniel! I liked how you rhymed at the start.

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